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1 GCSEFRENCH(8658)Marked PapersPaper 4: WritingUnderstand how to apply the mark scheme for the writing paperVersion 01 September 2017 Copyright 2017 AQA and its licensors. All rights retains the copyright on all its publications, including the specifications. However, schools and colleges registered with AQA are permitted to copy material from this specification for their own internal Education (AQA) is a registered charity (number 1073334) and a company limited by guarantee registered in England and Wales (company number 3644723). Our registered address is AQA, Devas Street, Manchester M15 help and supportVisit our website for information, guidance, support and resources at can talk directly to the FRENCH subject teamE: 01423 534 381 @AQAEXAMPLE RESPONSESThis resource comprises EXAMPLE answers with senior examiner commentaries and mark schemes for GCSE FRENCH (8658) Paper 4 Writing.

2 Examples of student work at both Foundation and Higher Tier are contained in this resource. Also included is a commentary for each piece of work, with the marks awarded. The resource aims to show how the mark scheme is applied. Whilst every attempt has been made to show a range of student RESPONSES , they are not intended to be viewed as model answers and the marking has not been subject to the usual standardisation process. 1 GCSE FRENCH Paper 4 Writing: EXAMPLE answers and commentaries Qu est-ce qu il y a sur la photo? Ecrivez quatre phrases en fran ais. Extract from mark scheme Question 01 For this question, students are required to write four sentences.

3 Each sentence is marked according to the following criteria. The maximum mark is 8. [8 marks] Mark Communication 2 The relevant message is clearly communicated. 1 The message is relevant but has some ambiguity and causes a delay in communication. 0 The message is irrelevant or cannot be understood. Foundation Tier Question one 0 1 Vous envoyez une photo WhatsApp votre ami(e) fran ais(e). 2 GCSE FRENCH Paper 4 Writing: EXAMPLE answers and commentaries Foundation student one Response Je mange de salade Je bu du l eau minerale Je suis parle avec mes copains Il y a professeur Commentary Question part Comments 2 marks.

4 The message is clearly communicated with no ambiguity. 2 marks. The message is clearly communicated with no ambiguity. General principle it is acceptable for students to describe what is on the photo in the past tense. 2 marks. The message is clearly communicated with no ambiguity. 1 mark. There is some ambiguity here. Is it the/a/my teacher? Total: 7 marks Foundation student two Response Le gar ons manger une salade Le fille manger un hamburger Le gar on travaille dans un restaurant Le waiter tait sympa Commentary Question part Comments 1 mark. There is a delay in communication. Note: General principle use of infinitive would delay communication.

5 1 mark. There is a delay in communication. 1 mark. There is some ambiguity here. Does gar on refer to a waiter/the boy eating salad/another boy who might be a waiter? 0 marks. The message cannot be understood. Total: 3 marks 3 GCSE FRENCH Paper 4 Writing: EXAMPLE answers and commentaries Question two Vous tes en vacances et vous crivez votre ami(e) fran ais(e). Mentionnez: o vous tes la m t o l h tel vos activit s de environ 40 mots en fran ais.[16 marks] Extract from mark scheme Question 02 For this question there are four compulsory bullet points, which are assessed for Content (10 marks) and Quality of language (6 marks), as specified in the criteria below.

6 The maximum mark is 16. The student is expected to produce approximately 40 words over the whole question. The number of words is approximate and you must mark all work produced by the student. [16 marks] Content Level Marks Response 5 9- 10A full coverage of the required information. Communication is clear. 4 7-8A good coverage of the required information. Communication is mostly clear but perhaps with occasional lapses. 3 5-6A reasonable coverage of the required information. Communication is generally clear but there are likely to be lapses. 2 3-4A partial coverage of the required information. Communication is sometimes clear but there are instances where messages are not conveyed.

7 1 1-2A minimal coverage of the required information. Communication is often not clear and there may be frequent instances where messages are not conveyed. 0 0 The content does not meet the standard required for Level 1 at this tier. 0 2 4 GCSE FRENCH Paper 4 Writing: EXAMPLE answers and commentaries Quality of language Level Marks Response 3 5-6 Uses a variety of appropriate vocabulary and grammatical structures. Generally accurate. 2 3-4 Vocabulary and grammatical structures generally appropriate to the task, with some attempt at variety. More accurate than inaccurate. 1 1-2 Vocabulary and structures used may be limited, repetitive or inappropriate.

8 There may be frequent errors. 0 0 The language produced does not meet the standard required for Level 1 at this tier. Notes A mark of zero for Content automatically results in a mark of zero for Quality of language, but apart from that, the Content mark does not limit the mark for Quality of language. 5 GCSE FRENCH Paper 4 Writing: EXAMPLE answers and commentaries Foundation student one Response Je suis dans le Grece et le temps est super car il y a soleil et il y a chaud. Je suis dans le Grece dans un h tel. Il y a une bon restaurant et un piscine et une bar chiq. Dans ma chambre il y a un grand television , un balcone et une grand lit.

9 Je suis dans le Grece avec mes amis et chaque jour nous avons jouer au foot ensuite nous avons visiter au restaurant et je mange un pizza. Commentary Content There is a full coverage of the required information: where they are, the weather, the hotel and the activities. Communication is totally clear for two of these. There are some areas in bullets 2 and 4 where there is some delay: il y a chaud and the last sentence does not communicate clearly. The work fits the criteria for award of marks in the top band, but the lower mark of 9 is appropriate. Quality of language The work is more accurate than inaccurate. There is some attempt at variety, although the structures in the last sentence are not totally accurate.

10 This, together with the number of minor errors would suggest a mark of 3 rather than 4. Total: 9+3=12 Foundation student two Response Je suis alle en Italie au bor de la mer avec mes aimes pour deux mois et reste dans une h tel. En vacances le temps en Italie qu en beau en Angleterre. Pendant les vacances, j ai joue au foot avec mes aimes et fair du vello. L hotel est grand et modern. Commentary Content The information relating to where they are, the hotel and activities is covered. The message relating to the weather does not communicate and there is some delay with language such as: mes aimes, fair du vello . The piece is borderline, but it is true to say that communication is mostly clear.