Exemplar Candidate Work ENGLISH LANGUAGE

1 QualificationAccreditedG C S E (9 -1) Exemplar Candidate WorkJ351 For first teaching in 2015J351/01 Summer 2018 seriesVersion 1 ENGLISH Candidate Work2 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 ContentsIntroduction 3 Exemplar 1 Grade 9/Mark 77 4 Exemplar 2 Grade 8/Mark 61 15 Exemplar 3 Grade 7/Mark 55 25 Exemplar 4 Grade 6/Mark 49 35 Exemplar 5 Grade 5/Mark 41 46 Exemplar 6 Grade 4/Mark 36 57 Exemplar 7 Grade 3/Mark 29 67 Exemplar Candidate Work3 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 IntroductionThese Exemplar answers have been chosen from the summer 2018 examination is open to a wide variety of approaches and all answers are considered on their merits. These exemplars, therefore, should not be seen as the only way to answer questions but do illustrate how the mark scheme has been always refer to the specification for full details of the assessment for this qualification.

2 These Exemplar answers should also be read in conjunction with the sample assessment materials and the June 2018 Examiners report or Report to Centres available from Interchange question paper, mark scheme and any resource booklet(s) will be available on the OCR website from summer 2019. Until then, they are available on OCR Interchange (school exams officers will have a login for this and are able to set up teachers with specific logins see the following link for further information ).It is important to note that approaches to question setting and marking will remain consistent. At the same time OCR reviews all its qualifications annually and may make small adjustments to improve the performance of its assessments.

3 We will let you know of any substantive Candidate Work4 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Questions 1-6 Exemplar 1 Grade 9/Mark 77 Exemplar Candidate Work5 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work6 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work7 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work8 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work9 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work10 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work11 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work12 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work13 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Examiner commentaryQuestion 1 (4 marks)These are good accurate responses but they should be expressed more concisely to save time.

4 The Candidate repeats the same point in different words in 1b and 2 (6 marks)A well-organised response that identifies suitable similarities. The Candidate could have saved time by omitting the final sentence of each paragraph which, in each paragraph, simply reiterates the point made in the first sentence of the paragraph. Where quotations and evidence are self-explanatory, there is no need for further comment at the end of the paragraph. Question 3 (10 marks)The opening sentence of this response gives a good clear overview of the structure of the text. The Candidate then takes a useful approach to the rest of the text by working through it sentence by sentence showing how they build on each other and picking out significant uses of LANGUAGE on the way.

5 There is a little cross-reference such as the contrast between bubbled over and riveted but more of this would have supported a higher 4 (AO3 - 6 marks and AO4 - 12 marks)The introduction in the first sentence is very basic and the first paragraph identifies a straightforward contrast they are interested in the natural world for different reasons. Many candidates carried over the idea of fascination or interest from Question 3 into Question 4 and failed to note that it was a different question with a different focus. There is a thorough and well-supported discussion of how long-lasting the effects of the natural world are in each text. The Candidate explores different aspects of the two texts and rounds the discussion off with a clear Candidate Work14 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Question 6 (AO5 24 marks and AO6 15 marks)The Candidate clearly understands the need to persuade the audience and locates the audience clearly by making several references to your children.

6 The Candidate has used a calm thoughtful style and organised their ideas into a clear sequence of paragraphs. Sentences are varied and well-managed with suitable punctuation within the sentence to guide the reader s understanding. The final one sentence paragraph does, however, seem rather Candidate Work15 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar 2 Grade 8/Mark 61 Exemplar Candidate Work16 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work17 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work18 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work19 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work20 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work21 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work22 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work23 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work24 GCSE (9-1)

7 ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Examiner commentaryQuestion 1 (4 marks)Good accurate responses which could have been more concise. It would be enough for 1b to say that they differed in colour and size without being any more specific as the question begins explain . Question 2 (3 marks)The first two similarities are valid even if the evidence is not always secure but the third similarity they both have influences in the reasons why they enjoyed is not clearly 3 (6 marks)There are elements in this response of both clear and developed explanation but the explanations are not always persuasive enough. For example, the Candidate explains clearly that the phrase bubbled over compares Bert to a pot on the boil but the comment that this shows he is on edge is not developed enough to gain 4 (AO3 - 4 marks and AO4 - 5 marks)The Candidate makes a clear evaluation of both texts.

8 Although the words/ positive and negative are vague, they successfully frame a discussion about how the writers present the experiences of the natural world. For example, the Candidate successfully contrasts the bright, happy adjectives with the battle imagery of Text 2. They are awarded a mark of 4 for comparison because of this kind of detailed comparison of how the writers presented their 5 (AO5 24 marks and AO6 15 marks)This response is stronger on purpose than audience. There are some references to audience being frustrated about the lack of detail of how the narrator fell and a comment at the end about what readers can learn. It is, nonetheless, a well written and effective piece with well-chosen vocabulary and controlled sentence structure which deserves marks in the highest Candidate Work25 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar 3 Grade 7/Mark 55 Exemplar Candidate Work26 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work27 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work28 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work29 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work30 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work31 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work32 GCSE (9-1)

9 ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work33 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Exemplar Candidate Work34 GCSE (9-1) ENGLISH LANGUAGE OCR 2019 Examiner commentaryQuestion 1 (4 marks)A good example of how to respond concisely and accurately, especially for 1b. Question 2 (6 marks)The Candidate identifies three appropriate similarities and provides suitable evidence from the texts for each 3 (9 marks)By organising the response around the development of the paragraphs the Candidate does demonstrate a good understanding of how the writer has shown Bert s growing fascination. For example he shows how the detailed description of the ants then leads to Bert being riveted by their appearance.

10 Many candidates felt it was enough to refer to the flea that fed on Bert s blood but that was information point rather than a presentation point. This Candidate , instead, correctly focuses in on the use of the word guest as being the most significant part of that description of the 4 (AO3 - 3 marks and AO4 - 5 marks)This response is unfortunately incomplete. The Candidate selects some relevant quotations which show the similarities between the texts but does not explore the differences in enough detail. There are many relevant quotations but they are often too long and are not examined closely by the Candidate to demonstrate why they are powerful descriptions of the effects of the natural world. Question 5 (AO5 18 marks and AO6 10 marks)The Candidate s style effectively describes the grandparents and what happened to them.