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1 PART2 USINGPATTERNSTODEVELOPPARAGRAPHS4 The DescriptiveParagraphA description is anaccount that creates avivid mental ability to describe people, places, or objects accurately is auseful life skill. Whether you are talking with a stylist about theexact hairstyle you want, sharing a funny or startling scene fromyour day with a friend in an email, or reporting on the structureof a plant cell for a biology class, you will use description tomake your Preview: What s the Point ofDescription? Making a PointUsing Description:One Student Writer sResponse Developing YourPoint UsingDescription Using Description inYour AcademicCourses Workshop: Writing aDescriptionParagraph Step Snow blows across the highway before me as Iwalk little, wavering trails of it swept along like apeople dispersed.

2 The snow people where arethey going? Some great danger must pursue hurry and fall, the wind gives them a push,they get up and go on again. JOHN HAINES, FROM SNOW 4 THE DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPHC opyright 2007 by Pearson Education, s the Point of Description?In a descriptive Paragraph , the writer uses sensory details such as sights, sounds,smells, tastes, feelings, and textures to create vivid images in the reader s mind. Anexperienced writer relies on sense memories of a specific experience to call to mindthese details. In addition, the writer often uses spatial order to create a clear visualimage of a person, place, object, or scene: the location or arrangement in space fromtop to bottom, bottom to top, right to left, left to right, near to far, far to near, insideto outside, or outside to day, we experience rich sensory details from television, movies, music DVDs,and daily life.

3 Think of a scene that grabbed your attention recently. What is yourmain impression of the scene? What are several details that make this impression sovivid or memorable? Description also may include or suggest time order because a person, place, orobject usually appears in a situation, or an incident usually occurs or suggests transition words signal that the details follow a logical order based onone or more of the following arrangement in space of a person, place, object, or starting point from which the writer chooses to begin the time frame as relevant to the description (see Chapter 5 forinformation about time order)Getting a mental picture ofthe person, place, object, scene, or situation helps awriter discover his or her point about the subject being described.

4 Study thefollowing photograph of a popular destination for travelers: the Riverwalk in SanAntonio, Texas. Use your sense memory of this or similar scenes to call up sensorydetails. Fill in the graphic with captions that capture the particular details of specificlocations on the Riverwalk. Then answer the question with a one sentence statementofthe overall main idea: What s the point or impression you are trying to make? 1 PHOTOGRAPHIC ORGANIZER: DESCRIPTIONWRITING FROM LIFEPART 2 USING PATTERNS TO DEVELOP is this detail in the scene?What are the sensory details?SIGHT: SOUND: SMELL: TASTE: TOUCH: AWhere is this detail in the scene?What are the sensory details?

5 SIGHT: SOUND: SMELL: TASTE: TOUCH: CWhere is this detail in the scene?What are the sensory details?SIGHT: SOUND: SMELL: TASTE: TOUCH: BUpper left bankrestaurants roofs lined with lights; lights in treeslaughter, conversation, musicdamp, chillyFar right banklights on walkway and in trees along riverlaughter, conversationLower left bankbrightly colored umbrellas; lights next to waterlaughter, music, conversationfood cooking such as grilled meat, onionsfajitas, margaritasdamp, chilly4 THE DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPHC opyright 2007 by Pearson Education, First Thoughts: A Prewriting ActivityBrainstorm about the images you just studied. Set a time limit, such as fiveminutes, and write in your notebook about the images you just studied and thedetails you generated.

6 Write as quickly as you can without is this detail in the scene?What are the sensory details?SIGHT: SOUND: SMELL: TASTE: TOUCH: DWhere is this detail in the scene?What are the sensory details?SIGHT: SOUND: SMELL: TASTE: TOUCH: What s the point?EPractice 1 PREWRITINGNear right bankgrey rock footbridge; landing; lights; people walkinglaughter, music, conversationrough, hard rock, coolnessMiddle of riverdark water; two boats full of touristslaughter, music, conversationdank water; wafts of food cookingdamp, chillyPART 2 USING PATTERNS TO DEVELOP PARAGRAPHSM aking a Point Using Description:One Student Writer s ResponseThe following descriptive Paragraph , written as an online review for tourists, offersone writer s point about the Riverwalk at San Antonio.

7 Read this description and theexplanations; complete the activities. Then, read the writer s journal entry about herexperience writing the Idea: The main idea is the pointthe author is making. Thetopic is Paseo Del Rio, theSan Antonio Riverwalk. Underline the author Order: The phrase left bank establishes spatial four more words orphrases that indicatespatial order. Relevant Details: Relevant details describeelements of the scene tosupport the point shimmers with color andlight. Underlineadditional details thatsupport this Expression: Sensory details such as cool, damp evenings, spicy fajitas, saltymargaritas, lights and sunset glimmer create avivid mental 3 more Del Rio: A Festival of Color and Light(1) The Texas spirit of fun and hospitality lights up Paseo Del Rio,the San Antonio Riverwalk.

8 (2) This festive and popular traveldestination shimmers with color and light. (3) Along the left bank,two lines ofbrightly colored caf umbrellas tropical red,Cancunblue, emerald green, lemon yellow shelter outdoor diners andadorn the cobblestone walk. (4) Above the rainbow rows ofumbrellas,white lights strung between oak trees along the walkingpath glimmer softly in the dusk. (5) Miniature white lights rim theeaves and roofs of the buildings behind the diners and illuminatethe graceful drape of the oak branches bending over them. (6)Diners can stay warm on cool, damp evenings with spicy fajitasand salty margaritas as they watch the lights of the Riverwalk andthe sunset glimmer upon the water.

9 (7) As they watch, a steadyflow of purple trimmed boats putter to midstream from under thebridge on the right side of the river. (8) On this side of the river, therock walls and the footbridge showcase the rough beauty of thearea s natural elements and earth tones. (9) Colorful lights tracethe arch under the footbridge. (10) Luminaries sit atop both sidesof the bridge s stone-grey railings. (11) At the far side of thebridge, more luminaries light the path along the water s edge. (12)People fill the path with laughter and conversation as they strollbeneath trees shimmering with countless tiny lights. (13) All alongthe river, this canopy of lights buffers the Riverwalk from thebuildings rising in the distance.

10 (14) The lights, the good food, thewater, the spectacle of color, the festive atmosphere provide aluscious retreat Texas style!4 THE DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAPHC opyright 2007 by Pearson Education, student writer of Paseo Del Rio: A Festival of Color and Light completedthe following reflection to record her thinking through the writing process. Readher writer s journal that describes a few key choices she made as she IDEA:I spent a good deal of time studying this picture before I began writing, and I still needed several revisions to get the effect I wanted. My first thoughts were about the vivid colors and lights and how much fun the Riverwalk looks like a festival.